What do you think of my poem?

Overall I thought it was okay. The last half was much more sturdy (if that makes sense). The first half to me was a little weak, perhaps you could add some more meat to it. The message here is clear: you yearn to break free yet are afraid of the world's reactions...you want to make a splash on the global scene, yet are held back by your own personal reservations. Thanks for sharing, peace.